Happiness
I am the jazz dancer on the colourful stage.
I am the girl helping her Dad with building.
I am the sun shining on the cold sea.
I am the sun shining on the cold sea.
I am a teddy bear getting cuddled every night.
I am a pool that cools down everyone.
Sadness
I am a dog that is alone.
I am a playground with no one to play with.
I am a zoo animal that has not been freed.
I am the echo of the words I hope you don't die.
I am the echo of the words I hope you don't die.
I really like your poem, Emily. It is very interesting. I liked everything about it. I hope that you get to be in word club someday. You did really well with your spelling and you used strong words really well, you are a very good writer, Emily. You used your personal best in your poem. From Suitte
ReplyDeleteI really like your poem of a dog stuck in the zoo. Have you learnt this poem of by heart? well if not its a great poem.
ReplyDeletehi emily I thought your poem was really awesome because it was about a dog and its cool.by Harry
ReplyDeleteI thought your poem was really good Emily.I think you'll be a poet when you grow up.Everbody should be jealous of you.by Libby
ReplyDeleteI liked the poem because it is very interesting
ReplyDeleteand cool.by Kayden
I liked the poem because it says ehco twice like an ehco and its about feelings and how poeple feel inside sometimes and it is true that poeple can feel diffrent inside.by Sarah
ReplyDeleteI really like your poem emily. It is awesome because I like dogs.From Travis
ReplyDeleteYou should make it rhyme. The rest is good. from shae
ReplyDeleteYour poem was exciting and fabulous. by sami
ReplyDeleteI realy liked how you rhymed it. The best line
ReplyDeletewas how you said I am a pool that cools everyone down. Another part was I am the jazz dancer
on the colourful stage. by Venus
I really loved how you put expression and sadness in. by Ashley
ReplyDeleteI think your amazing. Your poem was awesome. I think you are going to be a great writer and if you do make books I will read them all the time. From Savannah
ReplyDeleteI thought that your poem was fantastic
ReplyDeleteEmily.I think that you will be a very
good writer when you grow up.
I think you have a great mind.
Everyone will think you are awesome.
from Kylie
I really loved how you rhymed it.The best bit
ReplyDeletewas how you put in the colourful stage and I loved it.By Anna Barbridge
cool poem
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